"Etherized upon a table"
I
In a mechanical routine the birds sing and the wind blows; its six'O clock. The same thought repeats itself; before the brain went numb, with the realization that it wasnt rightly done. One shoe is still upside down, the socks are on the floor, the empty bottles next to the bed; and eyes still red. A leap out of the bed and into the world; the birds chirp and mourn. The car cranks alive. The old man in wheelchair by the mailbox looks emptily into the empty world. A school bus in the front that always stops. And never enough time for the breakfast.
II
The machines mourn, and cry as I, Once more, am surrounded by
the faces of wood, who bear the archaic smiles; with the work piled on the desk; the coffee mug empty, and the eyes still red.
The hour glass freezes; the death is delayed: the eyes from their sockets, behind the smiles, observe the devotion, as the sacrifice is brought on the altar of silicon to the gods of finance with a smile. The subtle glances of mercy at the clock are not answered, until it is time. The man by the computer looks emptily into the empty world.
III
The birds sing, and the wind still blows, far away in the land of the alive, in the dim shadows of the lamp lights. I sit here, on the table for two, after raising the question, like a dead body is raised from its coffin to fulfill some court’s ruling: hoping it’s not what I know - its not what I have always known. The wood has rotted, and the smile has faded: the question has been answered. Now my eyes are fixed on the empty glass, as I look emptily into the empty world.
17 comments:
Wow.
"they look emptily into the empty world". The world then must look empty through their own conceptual frame, and not yours, otherwise what reason would you have to face an empty world red eyed and groggy.
easier to sink back into empty sleep till noon.
well I gues u are right.
but they who? I said one man on the wheel-chair
Your prose is definitely better... say I after just one sampling of verse and one of prose. :D
they: the people who are like the old man in a wheelchair. He is not alone. You know it and I know it. And if there is one, there must be others. The fact that there is one is proof that there can be at any given time or in any given space anotehr like him. Thats just logical.
The 2 part poem, i truly love.
i absolutely LOVE how you have romanticized the mundane without encrypting it, and also without using cliché ysmbols or metaphores. Its original and refreshing. The topic is heavy and dull, like a 50/yr old stove. But the way you express yourself is bliss to read.
my favorite.
Why devote yourself to emptiness? AND what is the purpose of romanticization? Maybe a temporary escape... but ultimately it prolongs the emptiness... so... WHY?
dear anonymous,
I do not have the answer to why romanticize; what I have there is an observation; nothing more to it.
dear anonymous:
i think the concept or romanticizing the mundane has been done before by modern poets and writers. But the way vincent succeeded in doing that, in a poetic way, withiut making it hard to digest, its just remarkable, dont u think?
compare it to that other attrocity with the foot notes. You will see what i mean ;)
rotten indeed! :)
just cuz i called your masterpiece an attrocity doesnt make me rotten vince
:) so write more, i like it
if the definition of "dim" is "lacking in brightness", please explain to me how a shadow can be dim, without being a rather unpleasant repitition.
i noticed the style of writing in the third part is less fragmented. well the last line or so is more so than the first few lines.
why is that?
well no, nevermind thats not quit true. i dont know what is true.
but i still think THIS is the best post, despite your recent ploy to intimidate me in liking that condensed essay thing by posting my opinion lol.
Teapot, I loved your critique!!
Thats why I posted it on the blog, so everyone can read it.
at my group therapy, i decided that to liquify my tension i have to start drawing again.
so yesterday i sketched a cat.
well its not JUST a cat. its a rather pathetic and pitiful looking long haired cat. His whiskers are crickety and wiry, and his fur is wet and dirty looking. His tail is rather long... maybe too long. He looks so pathetic and helpless, despite the fact taht there is a big ol' fist holding its paws and squashing them real solid so it doesn't move or escaper, and the cat just doesnt even try to get out, its just stuck there, looking all helpless and disgustingly pathetic.
what do you think it means?
i think you need drawing lessons.
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